If skin is a cell
Then bodies are prisons
If mind is a hell
Then nightmares are demons
If life is a stage
Then death is our curtains
If love is a game
Then rules are uncertain
If eyes are a frame
Then windows are tinted
If time is a father
Then mine is abusive
If skin is a cell
Then I need pardon
If love never fails
Then this is my bargain
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I was just thinking something along those lines in the last few days.
I heard it as a rap bridge in a rock song…this probably wasn’t your intention. 😛
But it’s so concise and powerful, with the rhythm. Awesome write.
Thanks for sharing ❤
Music is what inspired me to write poetry actually, and often when I write I hear it as song rhythms in my head. That’s a very nice compliment 🙂 thank you!
very nicely done! so full of meaning. by the way thanks for leaving that comment back in my article, you gave me something to think about.
Thank you for writing it. I enjoy being challenged to think more 🙂
And thank you for the kind words
simple perfection 😀
I checked your categories out, and maybe it says much about me that the first one I selected was ‘pain’ …. and here’s me such a fun loving person… I’ll leave you to decide if that statement is true … or not.. ( strewth, just had a thought that you might think I was masochistic… !! Wrong!! ) 😉 xPenx
Thank you for taking the time to dig deeper into my world. I’m afraid my poetry lately is a slightly unbalanced view of me. I don’t show this blog to friends and family because the darkness here is not what they expect of me. Perhaps I am a personality of extremes, but my defining emotional lately has probably been pain. My life has certainly had many beautiful moments, but my expressions are coming out distorted lately from hurt I’ve incurred. I hope it won’t be a pervading theme forever, but pain, sadness, and tragedy certainly provoke me to write. Thank you
This is simply awesome…succinct, to the point and so finely crafted.
Very kind words 🙂 thank you for stopping by
I was just reading your reply to Lady Pen,
Penpusherpen as you will know her better
I would imagine and I too have noticed a
kind of melancholy edge to your words,
but you know all the experiences that one
shares, whether in reality or in our virtual
friendships here on the Internet, it all helps
to filter the thought processes of life…
By adding your inner thoughts in poetry
your reality is given a new breath of life to
savour, in essence the real you benefits
and as time moves on your whole journey
will eventually become much clearer 🙂
I like your poetry Vampire Weather 🙂
Androgoth
Thank you, my friend. I am grateful for the encouragement
Just another WOW!! You need to publish a book, VW!
A book? I wouldn’t know how to even begin going about that, and I don’t know how I would distribute it, but that is extremely kind of you to say! Perhaps one day. I would really like to create an outlet for my art eventually, and maybe I could find a way to combine the two.
Exceelent rhymes! Love the reflective nature. They told us in elementary school that conflict was important for a story to work and whether inner conflict/against self or against nature or another such types of conflicts create additional power in a poem. Music and poetry are largely about tension and release and can’t be always reflections of beauty or insights. Very well done!
If conflict is important to a story, then I am blessed with some amazing elements of it 🙂 Thank you for the input!