Fragile, the nature of us, being fashioned
Of flesh or of bone or of both being fastened
And woven together, though temporal being
Through course unexplained and, by force, no one seeing
To conquer, to hunger, to draw ever closer
Impeccable faults like impossible lovers
Unwinding by fate, perhaps, choice being loosened
In turn we are chosen; in pain we are proven
In wearing, like garments, we serve out our purpose
Till death do us part or calamities hurt us
Too easily severed, too short in our lasting
We die without answers and live without asking
Yet in our existing, though brief and unstable
In seeking we dream to be, if we are able
Intwined with another by strings or such things
As God in his love and the meaning it brings
Every line is perfection in this! There is a certain mystery in your imagery… so much between the lines that adds to the beauty of the poem as a whole… lots of layers, so much depth!!!
Thank you for digging in to the layers. I appreciate you taking the time to read and care! Mystery is the flavor of life, and I try to keep a bit of it available at all times 🙂
Your rhyme scheme is refreshing in its ingenuity- its hard to find quality rhyming poets nowadays (to the point where some publishers forbid people from submitting it!) The meter had got a certain kind of melodic quality to it as well, which I enjoy.
This is one of those poems that I liked without having to read over to it to find the things I liked- I just did. Which, to me, is more of an indication of a good poem than anything else.
Thank you for the comments and likes on my own blog as well. It’s always good to have support!
I am honored by your kind words. I appreciate you taking time to stop and visit my realm and share my work. Thank you very much!
1. The rhyme! It’s beautiful. impressive.
2. God! Philosophical perfection 😉 It’s so thought provoking and haunting 😀
I appreciate your insight! Thank you for taking time to read and share your thoughts!
This is so good! Love the musicality — every word contributes as necessary. I love the natural rhymes. Just perfectly chosen.
Thank you, my friend! I appreciate the support 🙂
Your arrangements are a reflection of your own innate “humanity.” Thank you for touching mine 🙂
I am glad you think I am human. Sometimes I feel quite alien 🙂
Thank you for the encouragement. To touch someone’s heart…that is a sacred thing.
A finely woven piece of artistry
I hope that you are enjoying a
delightful week and that you are
getting ready for Christmas 🙂
Thank you, androgoth. I appreciate the support!
This is so very brilliantly composed.
Thank you very much, my friend!