Adrift alone on open seas
At rest beneath a quiet sky
The depths below suspending me
As cloud parades go lazily
Across their stage adorned in white
No hint of earth or distant land
Has trespassed these horizon lines
My form reclines with open hands
Adjacent to this vast expanse
Emerging from my tired mind
I sense my body giving in
Against the pull of ancient tides
My restless soul, into the wind
Releases all it held within
The confines of this fragile life
Adrift alone on open seas
Beyond the reach of human shores
At peace, as once I longed to be
I sink into its melody
Content at last forevermore
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Another beautifully written poem. I found myself relaxing into the sea… Thank you for this tranquility and peace of just letting go….
Thank you, Betty! I appreciate your kind words. I’m thankful you stopped by 🙂
Your words are so tranquil, transporting me to a place of such peace. 🙂
Thank you, jadedheart. I’m glad I was able to transpose some of my thoughts into yours 🙂
This is sort of an elegy but brought out in a very subtle way. Great use of euphemisms. I admire all of your work and I hope you are doing well in health and state of mind. Blessings my dear friend.
Thank you, bluegem. I am still alive and moving around for the moment. Blessings to you as well, my friend! I look forward to seeing more of your work!
Great!!! Take it one day at a time there my friend. With the muse I’ve got, I imagine more and more 🙂 Don’t hold me to it though. Sometimes the well get dry and I have to wait for more rain 🙂 I will surely be looking out for more of yours though… so prolific 😀
Is there any other way to take it? I appreciate your encouragement. I have a wonderful life. I have been blessed with more than I could express. I have had an unusual last year with some unique heartbreak. Some things can follow you through your day and soak into your skin to the point you can never really escape them. I am thankful for the pain as well. It has certainly provoked a lot of poetry lately lol
Ok good to know you are positive. Just checking really 🙂 Yeah pain, love, passion and all those strong emotions certainly have a way of spilling out on paper or the web 😀 And certainly, pain really does have purging and rehabilitating effects.
Wonderful flow to the poem so gently beautiful. It tempts me to gather up all my conciousness and leave my body behind and drift through the galaxy and beyond. UMMM!! so tempting! xxxxxx
Thank you Willow! Just come back if you do, so you can keep writing. I would miss that 🙂
Have you ever floated on you back in the ocean on a beautiful day? Just relax and float and look at the clouds and blue sky? Well…that is the feeling you invoked. By the way…according to some National Geographic special…jelly fish are taking over the ocean in great numbers…we may be eating these things shortly:)
Yes, indeed I have. Until recently I lived within walking distance of the ocean, and I spent much of my time there. I have always been in love with it. As for the jellyfish, if we would be more careful with turtle populations perhaps they would stay at a more manageable number. They are beautiful. They are not very filling to eat, but they certainly are creatures of mystery and i love to watch them move
Death would certainly be easier and offer more tranquility most days.
I would not, for all the world, trade my life and my feelings for a different realm when I think of the blessings I have in the ones I love. I would suffer everyday in an immortal cycle if, in doing so, I could keep alive the memories and bring a little hope to those who are so precious to me. Thank you Muse. ❤
People truely can be blessings even through pain at times.
Another beautiful poem VW! Thank you for inspiring me every day ❤
Thank you Lydia. I appreciate your uplifting words 🙂
I hold so tightly to the memories of past life.
I’m sure you have some things in your life right now that are well worth celebrating. You are blessed more than perhaps you realize
Quite touching and flows beautifully.You are a remarkable writer.Blessed Be 🙂
Coming from someone of your talent, that is a very humbling compliment. Thank you very much, my friend
a tale of life and death and all the while a sounding of peace. wonderfuly written, thank you for sharing!
I believe there can be peace in death. Perhaps more peace than in life. Thank you Jenny
Hello 🙂 Thought it was about time I paid a visit to the world of Vampire weather rather than just thinking about doing so! This is a very atmospheric post…the imagery instantly gives a sense of being adrift on the open seas…and also of peace…enhancing your writing…I imagine being adrift in space could have a similar effect 🙂
So glad you stopped by, Ice Wolf! I’m thankful you took the time to read and comment. I hope to see you again soon!
I really liked the content. Some questions on the poem. On the first stanza, was this meant to be
Adrift alone on open seas
At rest beneath a quite sky
The depths bellow suspending me
or
Adrift alone on open seas
At rest beneath a quite sky
The depths bellow suspending me
Thank you! Actually, both your options look the same to me, but you did bring to my attention an error in the word “quiet” which I have corrected. Thank you!
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment! I’m so glad to see you here!
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I really liked the conent. Some questions on the poem.
Was this meant to be
Adrift alone on open seas
At rest beneath a quite sky
The depths bellow suspending me
or
Adrift alone on open seas
At rest beneath a quiet sky
The depths below suspending me
?
The first breaks your otherwise consistent steam of iambs and the second seems to align more with the meaning you are conveying.
The second question — if the above were typos and you meant “quiet” and “below” than we get a continuous iambic tetrameter — and it gets a little bit overdone by the end — would advise breaking it, even if very subtly. Wondeful poem — but I think you can take it up to dizzying heights by just adding a little bit extra in the meter — aligned with meaning of course — to heighten the impact.
Ah yes, I appreciate the advice. I am really not much of a poet, and know very little about it. Thank you for the input! I appreciate you taking the time to share 🙂
it is another amazing piece u made brilliant..,
🙂 Thanks!
Beautiful.
I appreciate that