The sun–so bright
The air–so cold
The world–so wide
I feel so old
I want to close
I want to close
I want to close
My eyes for now
The time–so strong
The dreams–so real
The day–so long
I start to feel
I want to close
I want to close
I want to close
My eyes a while
The weight–so much
The pain–so deep
I miss your touch
I need to sleep
I want to close
I want to close
I want to close
My eyes today
My heart–so weak
My head–so lost
My mind conceives
The simple thought:
I want to close
I want to close
I want to close
My eyes today
I love it 🙂 written so well and the pattern is awesome and so is the photo, btw 🙂
Thank you so much, Autumn! I’m thankful you liked it! My photos are always a bit odd, I’m sure 🙂
I feel this way a lot. Well written as usual VW!
It can be an exhausting life to be sure. Thank you very much Lydia. I hope you get some rest 🙂
I can’t express how much I love this one. Thank you.
Thank you, Muse! So when will you post another poem for me? 🙂
The meaning you want to convey has been done brilliantly….
Another wonderful piece from you 😀
Thank you! I appreciate the encouragement
🙂 i agree
I hope you find a place of rest my friend 🙂
I would have written earlier today, but I needed to sleep. Reading this was worth getting up for. 🙂
Wow, that is quite nice of you to say
I would think it would be more of a sleepy poem 🙂
That is just what feel like today, lets just close our eyes we could try again tomorrow! xx
I keep saying that to myself…lol
Thanks Willow. I hope your day gets better!
It made me a little tired reading this. Not because of the writing, but because I felt like I was living the moments being written of. Awesome work as always!
Thank you Scott. There are some levels of tired that go far beyond sleep 🙂
I appreciate your thoughts, my friend
Wonderful writing and I’m sure most of us can certainly relate to your feelings.
Thank you very much my friend. Hopefully no one relates too terribly well 🙂
I loved the allusions to the crushing and expansive external forces…and then of course the hammer…the one you love and miss. Sometimes it seems like the best choice is indeed to just close the eyes and let it all go…
Sometimes they don’t want to open again when I do. Thank you my friend
the lines is like a rhythm strikely goes into my heart, absolutely love it!!!
Thank you, my friend! So kind of you to take time to read it
I think this is my favorite so far. It’s so simple, but it gets such strong emotions across. I love that it reads more like a song than a “typical” poem.
I do write songs, but you are not allowed to tell anyone 😉
Thank you for the kind words. I appreciate the encouragement!
I’m a sucker for rhythmic chants –
and that world of safety and freedom
that lies beyond our eyelids, and
makes everything else, seace to
exist. I want to close, I want to close –
ah, now you got me doing it.
Thank you, my friend. I appreciate the support