Walls–they tell of those who were
The visage, faded, once was clear
Oh where have you then disappeared?
Into the night? Across the sea?
Or do those jaded memories
Still haunt your halls, as they do me?
Foregone–the night so cleverly
With darkness swallows every tear
A soundless cry on soundless ears
But walls–they loath forgetfulness
And not as I do they so turn
Their stories are not fast unlearned
In somber unrelenting tones
A chorus of distress is sung
For spirits absent far too long
T’would be such bliss to quell their taunt
But as I seek I find you not
And feel at last I am forgot
Oh its sad the very soul of this poem…like a caged bird with clipped wings it cries out for that moment when light and air was hers to play with..
you are some a wonderful poet VW.
I am grateful for your kind words, though I cannot say I feel the wonderful poet you believe me to be. Thank you, Soma
Heart wrenching….I felt the loss, the grief, and the love forlorn…..beautiful Vampire….
I always love reading your words for they always inspire and amaze me….thank you.
Celeste
I am glad to read your sweet compliment 🙂
No you VW you shall never be forgot your words will out live you. I love the poem I it’s essence. xx
You are too kind, Willow. I am glad you are back and active once again!
*_* so am I XXX
a soundless cry on soundless ears…..
beautifully sad…amazing power of words….
keep penning more with a true heart….it’s a masterpiece…..:)
love and peace…
Thank you, Pawan. I appreciate your encouragement
” and I feel at last I am forgot”…..
Far from forgotten VW… deep meaningful words… ~Sue
Thank you, sue 🙂
Absolutely stunning. It feels haunted, eerie, sad. I can feel your words. I love:
*T’would be such bliss to quell their taunt
But as I seek I find you not
And feel at last I am forgot*
Beautifully haunting! You are amazing with words VampireW
You are the amazing one, bipolarmuse. I merely strike a note on occasion 🙂
SO PERSONAL ……. BEAUTIFUL HEART WRENCHINGLY BEAUTIFUL
Thank you, Cat. I suppose there can be beauty from pain 🙂
IT’S THE HUMAN CONDITION TO FEEL AND EMPATHIZE …….
WHEN WE EMPATHIZE – WE SEE WITH THE HEART AND SOUL – I FEEL -…………
AND WE BECOME CLOSER TO UNDERSTANDING ONE ANOTHER ………
I WAS THINKING ABOUT YOU TODAY —- FOUND SOUNDCLOUD – AND THOUGHT ABOUT YOUR MUSIC – MUSIC IS A WONDERFUL OUTLET – AS YOU KNOW —- TO LET IT ALL OUT ……. HERE IS THE LINK ……
http://soundcloud.com/
BEST ALWAYS XX C
I have accommodated your request. Thank you for encouraging me 🙂
THAT’S SO COOL 🙂 CAN’T WAIT TO HEAR 🙂 AREN’T PEOPLE SUPPOSED TO ENCOURAGE ONE ANOTHER 🙂 SMILES – HAVE A BRIGHT BRIGHT SUNDAY 🙂 I TOTALLY FORGOT ABOUT DAYLIGHT SAVINGS TIME – LOL – ! BEST TO YOU ALWAYS 🙂
Thank you, Cat 🙂 a bright Sunday to you, also! I hope you were not late for anything today 🙂
NOPE ! JUST WOKE UP AND THOUGHT IT WAS LUNCH TIME IT WAS SO BRIGHT OUT 🙂 LOL 🙂
GORGEOUS DAY IN TORONTO —– IT’S SUPPOSED TO BE 20C BY THURSDAY – GETTING THE FLIP FLOPS OUT RIGHT NOW —– 🙂
A BEAUTIFUL WEEK TO YOU XO
wonderful and to the heart. so much feeling !
Thank you very much
The craft in this poem is very well done. The mood, as the comments above attest, is set powerfully in the first stanza. Then each stanza builds to the final stanza where the personal tragedy becomes fully realized.
The almost rhymes really work well as well as repetitive lines like:
A soundless cry on soundless ears.
I think you can be proud of this effort even though it might have been difficult to write and more difficult to publish perhaps.
The question, where have you then disappeared? holds special power in my life. It’s a question that strikes me suddenly on different days. Sometimes it is gone for awhile, but then it comes back with renewed force. This first stanza drew me to the poem and the last stanza sealed its power for me.
P.S. I like the art at the beginning of the poem and its abstract of life too.
Thank you. Everything you see on my blog is a part of me, and I do not take images from the internet in an attempt to keep all of my work original and personal 🙂
Thank you, Thomas, for such a lovely and thoughtful response. I appreciate your attentiveness to my words, and I love that you have interpreted them for your own life. That is the ultimate compliment 🙂
loved this poem xx well written
I am so thankful you feel that way, angel 🙂
Sadly sung, but expertly written, with (as usual) perfect meter and well placed rhyme. I love this, VW… powerful emotions!
Perfect is a word I am surprised to hear in conjunction with myself or my work, but I am flattered you think so. I find my work so riddled with scars and darkness that I can hardly imagine it to be perfect 🙂
But it is to me! 🙂
🙂
Absolutely beautiful, How you can make such pain gorgeous I will never know, Great work VW
I do not. It is the eye of the viewer that interprets it as such. Thank you for seeing it that way 🙂
Awesome writing always and the last stanza was felt dreadfully. To be forgotten by one we search for…
Yes, it is a most hollow feeling. Thank you, Scott
My favourite line?
“A soundless cry on soundless ears”
This poem resonates within my heart. Thank you for posting.
You are missed
Another lovely work. Feeling this in my bones 🙂
Thank you, my friend 🙂
VW, such a very strong and poignant and ringing poem to describe how one is left “forgot” when viewing posts on memorial walls honoring those long gone, long missed, long ached for!
Thank you, Granbee. I am glad you see it in such a grand scale
Very touching but full of sorrow VW, but is anyone ever forgotten? For there will always be at least one who will hold memories close and never forget.
I suppose “forgotten” could fall into the idea of someone who once took time to be with you often and make their presence known gradually fading away into obscurity, but perhaps nothing is truly forgotten and all is recorded somewhere for eternity 🙂
Very true, there are times we are forgotten by those we never thought would forget us, but there are times we may only think we are forgotten…..sometimes those from our past that we once held dear can surprise us.
So true, my friend. People are full of surprises 🙂
Beautiful and powerful, but got me choked up especially with the last line.
That is sweet of you to say. Thank you for the kind comments!
Both the rhythm and meaning behind these words are captivating! Great work, my friend 🙂
Thank you so much!
I wonder sometimes how someone elses words are actually how I feel….
Haunting words my Friend….whispered with such clarity
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maryrose
I am sorry you must feel as I. I would not wish it upon any living thing. Thank you for your kind words!
I wouldn’t wish it on anyone either, …
and you are welcome….
I like the clarity I feel when I read your thoughts…
I know that won’t make sense, but it helps me see me when I read you…
Take Care…
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maryrose
Thank you kindly for your warm words 🙂